I am not entirely clear on what his issue is with her face. The only thing that I see is the red eyes, which seems like something that would be referred to as eyes, and the shadow-teeth, which are pretty scary in their own way but could just be paint or a tattoo or something and shouldn’t be all that shocking given that he himself has cute fangs on his mask. It is just a subjective opinion from one random person but it feels as though he is overreacting to her face and it causes me to stop reading for a moment to try to figure out if I am missing something.
He is entitled to overreact, no doubt scary makeup has often been quite effective in battle, so I honestly can’t actually fault this at all, it is a natural part of the character. It is possible that making it a bit more clear to what he is referring, either with a longer(and thus awkward) description of his problem or perhaps some sort of inconsistent magical glow around her weird features? Really, I can’t think of any way to do that better, but I figured that I would mention that it threw off my focus in case it helps…
Also, that spear going across the panel is really cool, it really makes it threatening, but it also makes it look as though he is coming from her front/right when it seems that everything else consistently makes it appear that he is coming from her side-left. Between her eye/expression, posture, gestures, and the 5th panel’s layout it is actually really well conveyed where they are in position to each other. That is actually much of the problem, it feels as though he is introduced with his spear in her face and suddenly he teleports to her side.
Having said that, I am really loving the comic. The characters are compelling. The actions are expressive, the expressions are clear, the setting and plot don’t feel forced. The backgrounds are atmospheric(though now that I stop and glare at them the clearing they are in is bizarrely neat, but the background is doing its job of conveying the scene without drawing attention so I didn’t notice until after I’ve been looking at them for several minutes…)
Even the third panel is excellent, it just threw me off a little.
wOlfmare I hope you feel better soon my friend! Took me by surprise that you are though. What’s wrong anyways? If you can tell me what it is, perhaps I can give a helpful suggestion. I know a handful of natural remedies.
Mostly trouble at work and exhaustion from being sick. Nothing to worry about, just about done recovering. Working on the next page now, so it should be up later today ^^
I was trying to see if you had a cold or something of sorts, but if your already over it then good! Never put work before your health though, I have heard of many a great man that died this way. On a lighter note YAY!! The wOlf is back in business!! 😀
I think the question he should be asking is “What’s happened to -MY- face?!”
gah, ignore 1 of those posts, i thought it wasn’t getting my message
Will do =P
I am not entirely clear on what his issue is with her face. The only thing that I see is the red eyes, which seems like something that would be referred to as eyes, and the shadow-teeth, which are pretty scary in their own way but could just be paint or a tattoo or something and shouldn’t be all that shocking given that he himself has cute fangs on his mask. It is just a subjective opinion from one random person but it feels as though he is overreacting to her face and it causes me to stop reading for a moment to try to figure out if I am missing something.
He is entitled to overreact, no doubt scary makeup has often been quite effective in battle, so I honestly can’t actually fault this at all, it is a natural part of the character. It is possible that making it a bit more clear to what he is referring, either with a longer(and thus awkward) description of his problem or perhaps some sort of inconsistent magical glow around her weird features? Really, I can’t think of any way to do that better, but I figured that I would mention that it threw off my focus in case it helps…
Also, that spear going across the panel is really cool, it really makes it threatening, but it also makes it look as though he is coming from her front/right when it seems that everything else consistently makes it appear that he is coming from her side-left. Between her eye/expression, posture, gestures, and the 5th panel’s layout it is actually really well conveyed where they are in position to each other. That is actually much of the problem, it feels as though he is introduced with his spear in her face and suddenly he teleports to her side.
Having said that, I am really loving the comic. The characters are compelling. The actions are expressive, the expressions are clear, the setting and plot don’t feel forced. The backgrounds are atmospheric(though now that I stop and glare at them the clearing they are in is bizarrely neat, but the background is doing its job of conveying the scene without drawing attention so I didn’t notice until after I’ve been looking at them for several minutes…)
Even the third panel is excellent, it just threw me off a little.
Wow, that was quite the mouthful! Thanks for the feedback, I can honestly say it helps.
Hope you feel better soon, w0lfmare!
wOlfmare I hope you feel better soon my friend! Took me by surprise that you are though. What’s wrong anyways? If you can tell me what it is, perhaps I can give a helpful suggestion. I know a handful of natural remedies.
Mostly trouble at work and exhaustion from being sick. Nothing to worry about, just about done recovering. Working on the next page now, so it should be up later today ^^
I was trying to see if you had a cold or something of sorts, but if your already over it then good! Never put work before your health though, I have heard of many a great man that died this way. On a lighter note YAY!! The wOlf is back in business!! 😀